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There is no mercy in this
casualness
this space that we don't share and the
distance. You are the water
that I'm drowning in and it isn't
the good kind of not-breathing. I'm wishing
that summer wasn't so long and
I had ways to forget you.
But I don't
have anything but thunder and storybooks,
tears and memories of nothing worth recalling.
And there you are going on living and
I am sorry that I can't
be the sky or the sea for you.
I'm sorry that I don't have what it takes
to make you smile at me.
:iconseeinglight:
About the pain of forsaken love.

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-SeeingL*ght
:icontywyllation:
it seems that there is a lot of randomness in the spacing but there appears to be a hidden pattern that i cant quite make out. the drowning part, was a bit confusing, but after i looked at it, i understood what you meant. the "and there you are going on living and/ i am sorry that i can't/ be the sky or the sea for you." didn't really seam to flow properly, it may have been better to divide that part up by phrase, or thought. other than that it was actually very good! keep up the great work!
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~arachelle905 Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. So sad. D: Very poignant feeling in it. Reminds me of a little heartbreak I had a few years ago over the summer. I felt the same way as this line of:
"I'm wishing
that summer wasn't so long and
I had ways to forget you."
Very nice!!
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:iconseeinglight:
=seeinglight Jul 10, 2012   Photographer
Thanks, I'm really glad you like it (:
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~ExaltedPoet Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap::typerhappy:
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